In the article "The Perlis of Over-sharing", Emm(2014) asserts that the
precautions should be taken to prevent personal information from
leakage. He explains, we might focus too much on the Internet's
convenience and neglect the danger of sharing unnecessary events online.
Emm stresses that over-sharing might not only cause personal
consequences, but will also threaten the organization we work for. The
author also states that we might be in low-guard when using mobile
devices as they are not cybercriminals' preys. In short, we should
be cautious when making use of Internet.
David. E. (2014, March 21). The perils of over-sharing in social networks. Huffpost Tech. Retrieved from http://www.huffingtonpost.co.uk/
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ReplyDeleteWe feel that the main ideas of the article are well captured and organised in a logical manner. However, we feel that there are some sentence structures that you may need to pay attention to. Such as:
"Emm stresses that over-sharing might not only cause personal consequences as sharing our company’s events might threaten its security."
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Okay！Thank you for the comment and the reminder！
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